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怎么从雅思写作范文中得到启迪?

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  怎么从雅思写作范文中得到启迪?雅思范文有很多,主要的是要利用好范文,从中学习其方法。


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  那么接下来将以一篇范文为例,进行详细的解说。

  雅思题目:

  More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

  前考官9分范文:

  Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.

  The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

  However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities.

  In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.(273 words, band 9)

  雅思9分范文评析:

  本题是一道多问题类型话题,①需要考生解析居住城市所遇见的困难,②以及给出政府所能做出的改善建议。

  Cities are often seen as places of opportunity(a better life), but there are also some major drawbacks(extremely difficult/difficulties) of living in a large metropolis(a city). In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life(make urban life better) for the average inhabitant(everyone).

  首段:改写题目+自己想法。括号中为原文题目。

  注意:Simon考官偏爱两句首段方式,简洁明了。

  句式:被动句+there be句型

  The main problem for anyone (who hopes to migrate to a large city) is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

  第二段,共五句:

  ①+②:生活成本高+细节拓展(举例:住房、交通、食物)——使用比较:be much higher, pay higher prices

  ③:社会问题多(举例:犯罪、贫穷)——使用比较:in comparison

  ④:空气污染重(源于交通问题,然后顺带提到交通拥挤)

  ⑤:简单总结

  句式:定语从句+表语从句

  However, there are various steps (that governments could take) to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution a第三段,共五句:

  ①:简单总起

  ②:方案一,降低生活成本——投资廉价房源

  ③+④:方案二,减少空气污染、减轻交通压力——限制汽车使用,使用清洁型新汽车。举例——伦敦拥堵费

  ⑤:方案三,减轻交通压力——从市中心外移工业企业

  句式:there be+定语从句+非限制性定语从句

  In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality(make urban life better) of life for all city residents(everyone).

  结尾一句,再次申明观点,改写原文,或者改写首段第二句观点皆可。

  全文总结:

  全文共运用:被动句+表语从句+非限制定语从句+2句there be句+2句定语从句

  large cities —— a large metropolis —— urban areas —— major cities

  a better life —— places of opportunity

  difficulties —— major drawbacks

  do much more —— tackle these problems —— implement a range of measures

  improve city life —— enhance the quality of life

  everyone —— average inhabitant —— all city residents

  rural areas —— a small town or village —— provincial towns —— regions

  public transport —— vehicle —— traffic

  public transport systems are usually overcrowded —— congestion

  注意:同义替换并不代表意思相同,只要类似即可


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